tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2869602378467775975.post7694728067007495310..comments2013-07-14T15:58:15.180-04:00Comments on Pedestrian Protection: Gobbledygooksovietturkeyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08809665569441176680noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2869602378467775975.post-33429659592615217792008-05-05T00:42:00.000-04:002008-05-05T00:42:00.000-04:00Hah, not sure how much this speaks to me, but your...Hah, not sure how much this speaks to me, but your point is well taken, it is the things which truly don't matter in life that are for better or worse that often become the most significant (drinking group, smoking group, sewing group, poetry group etc). <BR/><BR/>I'm curious about the recurring theme of the polluted town. I think that muddles the main point a bit (although it could be argued that that's fairly fitting of the poem in itself), it's a simple enough metaphor in the end though.<BR/><BR/>Also I suggest switching the order of these two lines:<BR/><BR/><BR/>"in time<BR/>the creek will lead to the ocean<BR/><BR/>for now<BR/>I catch tadpoles in the slime"Gunter Heidrichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12936627110571521861noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2869602378467775975.post-84534735367866350362008-03-11T21:13:00.000-04:002008-03-11T21:13:00.000-04:00'Homage' like Paris bringing Helen back to Troy.I ...'Homage' like Paris bringing Helen back to Troy.<BR/><BR/>I think the final stanza is particularly badass, if it's an appropriate way to describe it. So assertive, so ominous.<BR/><BR/>I always hate when people say this (to me, it implies a certain amount of inconsistency on the part of the author), but this is my first choice of all the things you've posted here. <BR/><BR/>Serves its purpose well.sovietturkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08809665569441176680noreply@blogger.com